In-class writing

Both of the essays wrote about the book, Romeo, and Juliet. I personally thought they've got a high grade because they tend to analyze the character and their performances. They both have a great synopsis of explaining the entire book. Then, they tried to focus on their interpretation of the book. Afterward, they then put their interpretation under the performances they have. In Sam's essay, I graded as 5, 8, 5 because of the literal analysis. Particularly, In Sam's essay, she talks about the overall conflict in the story by showing the IB a brief summary of what's the play like. Also, she then analyzes the character Juliet, then she also analyzes a specific act by stating the Shakespeare's understanding. For example, she points out how Juliet would rather marry to Romeo than Paris, and explaining why with the sentences, and words. Then, she shows us the actions and emotions that she would have in the performances. She even talks about her understanding of the changes in the character Juliet, she, at first, hates the character, yet when she gets in touch with the character, she changes her mind.
In Julia's essay, she uses text to back up her point of view. For example, she thinks that Romeo is a character with passion, then she uses text to support her idea. However, she didn't talk a lot about the character and summary of the story. However, she had a lot of performances in the acting part, where she wrote a lot about how she should act in this with the quotes. She, moreover, tells us the relations and the hardships she was doing with her performance. All in all, she did a wonderful of giving the full performances about where to do this and express her emotions in this part or that part. I will give a grade of 4, 8, 5.
In my essay, I can adjust more with the performances, and with a brief summary of the story, it really helps the audiences or the people to understand the overall story. I also should cut off some part where were unnecessary. For example, I didn't have to be that repetitive of claiming my idea. I can explain only one time because they already knew the story and I just need to focus more on the performances.